Haggard's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[MSPaintWhatDoYouWantToBe?]

Too fast

The quality of the images changes very often. Some of the pictures look very nice and detailed while others are just some boring stick figures. There are even some very unoriginal ones in there like the "FFFFFFFUUUUU-"-face.

Also the slideshow moves really fast; sometimes there isn't even enough time to look at the whole picture before it moves on to the next. I think some buttons (play/pause, forward, backward) would really help out here.

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[Action Movie!]

Hmmm

Well, the "intro" was nice. Funny sound effects, smooth animations and simple but clean graphics. But after that all we got was a spinning triangle with flashing colours in the background.

Too bad, I think you showed that you have talent in the intro, so don't waste it on spam submissions like this.

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[Intelligent Critique]

Funny

It's funny what you did in this flash. The reading was very nice and the voice fit pretty good to what was being said.

However, while I liked that you put the review on the screen it kinda annoye me that the graphics and little animations you did constantly where moving over the text I tried to read.
Sure, I could have just listened to the voice, but when there's text on the screen I try to read it.

Also, it was kinda hard to concentrate on the graphics while the text constantly scrolled in the background. Maybe you should add subtitles. Two lines of text and the rest of the canvas can be used for the graphics/animations.

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W-P-S responds:

what the hell is up with all these review request club reviews?
there are like
6 of them

what the fuck

[Hurshnenglurper 2009]

Hmmm

There are a few funny scenes in here, but most of the time I didn't exactly know what was going on on screen.

The musical selection is quite nice (and I just listen to jungle mumble... and I AM glad you only used the first few seconds of that song... >_>), but sadly most songs are playing for only a short amount of time.
Also, some scenes are very fast paced so it's hard to really get what is shown on screen. For example the first golf scene, I couldn't hardly read what was on that sign before the scene was already over again.

Then, the transition between the scenes could have used some more work. That strange smiley face with the flashing background doesn't look too good at all.

I liked the idea of the added commentary. This gave some nice background infos on the scenes.

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Surn responds:

"some scenes are very fast paced so it's hard to really get what is shown on screen. For example the first golf scene, I couldn't hardly read what was on that sign before the scene was already over again."

Yah, several people have already complaining about the shortness. But I guess from what you said about the sign I see that I should try to balance visual busyness and duration on screen.

"Then, the transition between the scenes could have used some more work. That strange smiley face with the flashing background doesn't look too good at all."

Good thing I took out the sound effects. I should definitely make a better transition.

"I liked the idea of the added commentary. This gave some nice background infos on the scenes."

Thanks and thanks for looking at my work!

[CoolJaw: O.S. II-V]

Story picks up

I think you've found a good cliff hanger where you ended this chapter. Now (nearly) everyone who read this chapter eagerly awaits the next one to see how the story continues.

I agree with other reviewers that the developement of the story is quite slow, but I think this is a good thing. It may be boring to others but I like it when a story takes its time to develope. This gives me the chance to really dive into the world the author creates (this fondness for slow story developement is one of the reasons I like the stories of Stephen King so much, I guess ^^).

Anyway, the first half of this chapter offered the usual unique drawing style I saw in the first chapter and on some of your pictures in the art portal. However, the backgrounds are a bit lacking. Luckily you start to use more backgrounds in the second part, where Mr. Jaw enters the bar. I liked that you wrote some of the typical phrases on the walls in the restroom. The mirror was a nice addition as well. I hope you continue with backgrounds like these because they add a lot more depths and atmosphere to the comic.

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Celx-Requin responds:

Yeah I prefer to unravel things slowly because I find that in this current day and age story has taken a backseat to the pursuit of constant stimuli.

Which is why my two favorite t.v. series were "The Sopranos", and "Six Feet Under" both of those shows had really shocking and absurd situations, & yet because of the way the story was presented nothing that happened ever seemed like a "paper dragon" moment.

Also it's interesting that you mentioned Steven KIng, did you catch the reference I threw in the comic to one of his stories?

Thanks,
- Celx

[CoolJaw: O.S. I-V]

Unique

I really like the style of this submission. Not only the drawings but the whole layout. Too bad the "Play" button didn't work, but I could read the comic by advancing the pages manually anyway.

I like the music you selected. Personally I found the "No / Tomo"-track (yeah, I hope that's how it's called, couldn't make it out too clearly) the most fitting for the comic as it adds a lot to the creepy/nightmarish atmosphere.

However, you should make the texts in the menu a bit bigger. Sometimes I had trouble reading it.

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Celx-Requin responds:

The play button was supposed to replay animations that occurred in the comic,
however after thinking about it I'm deciding to not show the "animated" version of the comic until a later date.

Also yes the track was listed as no/tomo, the actual title is no tomorrow by Akira Yamaoka.

Thanks for the review!
- Celx

[Silent Hill Menu]

Fits well

Well, I'm not a big fan of the Silent Hill series. In fact, I have only finished the first game and had a quick look at the 3rd or 4th. But what I got from the first game... this menu fits very good into the world of Silent Hill. The constant flickering and statics on the screen create nearly the same nightmarish atmosphere as the games do.

Judging from this menu, I think the world misses out on a great flash.

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Fro responds:

Thank you

[Ashura The Hedgehog Ep 1]

Decent

Well, nothing too new or too original for a storyline, but you presented it in a nice way. You used the sprites in a very good way and the fighting scenes where interesting to watch.

I noticed some errors in the backgrounds. Sometimes there was noticeable gap between the background images (for example in the very first fighting scene). This is something you should pay a bit more attention to, as the backgrounds are nearly as important as the main storyline.

Sound effects and music are well chosen, they fit nicely to the flash and give us something to listen to. Too bad the characters didn't have voices, though.
The subtitles are nice and I like the subtitle bar you used. However, I couldn't advance them by clicking on the subtitles, instead I had to use right click and play to advance the flash.

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[Magic Guts Power!]

Nice try

Actually the movie is quite funny. I like that you chose to draw a "realy" character instead of just a stickman. The drawings look pretty good.

The animations are quite smooth as well. Nothing too fancy here, but overall it all looks very natural. I liked that you used a simple red line to indicate the "fire" that came out of the boys guts. It isn't too hard to draw a red line and yet it looked pretty good. Even took me a time to realize it was just a simple line.
However, the lines didn't work that well for the lasers that last thing was shooting from his eyes. Maybe you should use a smaller tool to draw the beams.

The storyline is a bit weird, but maybe it can be explained that everything just was the kid's imagination.
The sound effects are chosen well. Maybe you could cut down on the "swish"-sounds the boy made every time he moved. It got a bit annoying towards the end.
Also the voice over had a lot of statics in it, you should try to fix that.

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topatisen responds:

Yeah, at first I started to make it with a stickfigure, but then I thought that almost every movie features a stickman, so I drawed a real character instead. Yeah, the story is weird. I have no idea if it is his imagination or if it is for real :P. I totally agree, the beams look a bit cheap, I know, I could've put in some more effort into those.