Haggard's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Luigi the janitor]

\m/

This could have been a classic flash movie if you worked a bit harder on it.

First of all, the sprites are too small, so that it's a bit hard to tell what's going on there. Try using bigger sprites or resize the sprites to something bigger.
That way you could also work with facial expressions, thus adding more content to your flash.

Also, don't use all black text on a dark background as it is quite hard to read. I misread "you've" as "you're" at first glance. Either use some speech-bubbles with white backgrounds or use some subtitles.
The best solution would be some voice acting, but this is quite hard to do.

The gun Luigi used to shoot was ridiculously oversized. It was nearly as big as Luigi himself. You should put a bit more effort into your flashes and try to get all in corresponding sizes.

What hurts this movie the most are the "bullet holes". They are just plain red circles, which looks very bad. It also didn't look good that Mario and Yoshi were just standing there after being shot. Try manipulating the sprites a bit more, maybe with some gore effects like heads being blown off and slumping down bodies.

Last, but not least, I think the plot needs some work. Why was Luigi shooting everyone? Yoshi making some strange noises hardly can't be the reason for that. So show to us that he gets sick of being a janitor with Luigi ranting while he's doing his job or maybe he has a really bad day where everything goes wrong and then he just can't take it anymore.

{ Review Request Club }

mothballs responds:

Everyone said there was no plot...but believe me, a janitor is a very low paying and stressful job, so therefore they have bad tempers.

Thanks fo the review.

[Textual Adventures III]

\m/

It was a funny short flash with quite an original concept.

Using text instead of drawn characters is a good idea, imho, but it would be better if you had some voice acting in there as it is quite hard to read the characters names and what they are saying at the same time. I nearly missed that it was Han Solo in that Falcon there.

The rest of the graphics aren't that good as it is very hard to tell what exactly it is that you wanted to draw, but it fits in the concept quite well. But I think it would still be better if you'd try to create some better graphics.

Concidering the length and the graphical content of the flash the file size seems quite big. I don't know if it is the song you used at the end or the program you used to create this flash is to be blamed for the file size...

{ Review Request Club }

Frenzy responds:

Good ideas, thanks for the review!

[Shared joy is double joy]

\m/

Very random and very short. It's always a thin line between pure genius and utter crap. Yours is more on the "genius"-side as I really liked the character sounds and the music.

The graphics are good, but a little improvement could be done here as it looked quite choppy sometimes.
The animations are very smooth but I think a higher framerate would have been a bit better for this movie.

The plot itself is very strange and as I've already said: Either on loves it or one hates it. I think I love it ^^. It's very original and funny.

{ Review Request Club }