Haggard's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[ZikiZaki stick fight]

Too fast

Can't say much about this flash as it went by in a flash (pun intended). Turn down the FPS or make use of a "next" button, so we could actually read the text and see what's going on there.
Or strech out the scenes on more frames and not just one.

From what I could make out, the graphics are below average (just sticks, no backgrounds) and animtations aren't good either. Try to work on your drawing skills because stick men are overused and you need to come up with an awesome stick movie if you want to impress people with it.

Also work on your animation skills. Tweens should only be used very carefully, it just looks unnatural if peoples arms and bodys tween around the screen.

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[Sad Link]

Too short

I think this should be longer. The joke was all right, but the flash only lasts for a few seconds. It's hardly worth the wait.

The graphics are all right and the little animations you had where ok, too. Now you just need to lengthen the flash a bit. Maybe show how Zelda and Link are happy together and then after a few scenes of them, show how Link is sad and Zelda goes down on Mario.

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J0hnnyR0tt3n responds:

lol well admittedly I kinda rushed this animation, but I may go back and make it better eventually.

[Don't Fuck With Tray]

Short

Very short, but pretty nice.
The guy in blue is a bit hard to understand, maybe you should have edidet the sound file a bit and turn the volume of that guy up.

The transformation looks very realistic, so the hard work pays off here.

Well, there's really nothing more I can say about that, heh. Morphing looks great, but could have been accompanied by some sound effects.

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[The Blues]

Nice flash

It's a pretty nice flash. I like the idea you came up with to the audio. Showing how the mother reacts to her son's constant playing of the harmonica with alcoholism and suicide attempts was a good idea.

However, I didn't really understand the ending... or more like: I did understand it, but why does it end there? What happens to the son after he gets to school? And what happens to the mother after the son comes home again? ;)
And what happened to the father? He's never to be seen again after he handed over the present.

The coloring could use some more work as well. Some shadings here and there make the whole thing look more realistc.

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[Castle Crashing The Clay]

Too short

I felt this was too short... two very short clips with a very unsteady camera isn't really satisfying.

The first one was just some basic movement of the clay figure, the second one was a bit better. I liked the idea here.

I was thinking "That guy needs a tripod!" because especially in the first clip the camera moves around way too much. This is very annoying and it's hard to concentrate on the figure when the camera sways around so much.

On the second clip you should make sure that the figure is sharp all the time not just the background. We could see the TV clearly but as the figure moved closer it got more and more blurry.
Maybe you could make two pictures and then edit them together. One picture of the background you want to use, the second one is the figure. Then edit them together and you have a sharp background and a sharp foreground.
Of course for this method you have to have some experience with photo editing software.

Last but not least, I felt the background music wasn't really fitting. I don't need music in the intro where you just explain what you made. Also the music didn't fit to the dancing clay figure. So, choose a short piece that fits and add it just there.
Then for your second clip choose a different track, maybe something more creepy. Again, just add it when the clip is playing.

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[--Nightmare--]

Good

Opening sequence was very nice. A nice little town, a good neighbourhood.
But I felt the intro could have been a bit longer. Maybe show Mr. Johnson how he get's home from work or how he finishes some work in his garden. Then to relax he pours himself a drink and grabs a good book. Would work a bit better, I think.

Also, voice acting instead of the text on the screen would be really nice to have. Hearing Mr. Johnson say "It was just a bad dream" would create a much denser atmosphere than just reading the text.
It would also create a better change over from the first "nightmare" scene to the second part of the movie. At first I thought it just started over.

The backgrounds could use some more work, too. The gray background is a hughe let down for an otherwise good flash.

You may have noticed I'm nitpicking here a bit, critizising some small things in your flash. But that only means I have nothing else to complain about. ;)

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[Spread His Wings]

Poor turtle...

The joke reminds me a bit of Ice Age where that one mammoth thinks it's an opossum.

The walking sequence did look a bit strange. More like the turtle was floating instead of walking. A bit more work on that aspect is necessary, I think.
But other than that the graphics and animations looked nice.

Overall it's a pretty short flash with a good punchline.

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Insanimation responds:

OK, thanks for taking the time to review :)

[The ALL Sprites Collab]

Some good, some not so good scenes

There are some really good scenes in here. The introduction for example is very nice. And where Snake is shooting Kirby and then hides in the box... very nice!
But on the other hand there are also scenes that are plainly boring. The ones where Luigi gets the mushroom and shrinks or where he jumps down a cliff for example. Scenes like those are a let down for the whole collab and I think it would be better if you had turned them down.

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[Super Mario Invaded pt.2]

Again pretty good

After watching this I'm even more confused... but it's a good thing because now I have to watch future episodes as well. This confusion keeps me interested. ;)

I noticed that you now used arrows instead of dots to indicate which character is speaking. Now the speech bubbles LOOK like speech bubbles. Much less confusing than in the first episode where at first I thought the characters where just thinking.

But I noticed some annoying spelling errors like the infamous "there"/"they're" and "your"/"you're" errors. Those can be really easily avoided and will make the flash a lot better if they are avoided. ;)
So, every time you want to write "your" speak out lout the sentence with the words "you are". If it doesn't make sense, then "your" is right. Otherwise you want to type "you're". ;)

The action is again very nice in this flash. I hope you can keep this up.

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sleeeeep responds:

haha i got alotta flak for my grammer in this movie. So in my 3rd movie i will be sure to catch all of that milarky. Thanks for the review.

[Super Mario Invaded]

Good start

This is a good start for a series. I've seen other series that bother with a long as intro and explanations, but your flash dives straight into the action, which is a nice change from all those long intros. ;)

I liked the sound effects you used. Of course you had the typical "mario is jumping" sounds, but you also had some other sounds like the water splashing or when the toads where running. This made the flash much more interesting to watch.
However, sometimes there seemed to be some static sounds, shortly before the Toad entered Mario's castle.

The speech bubbles looked more like thought bubbles because of those dots that point to the head of the character speaking. Maybe an arrow pointing would be better here. But overall the bubbles worked quite well. I had enough time to read the text plus the text was easy enough to read. So you've done a good job here.

Now I'm wondering how this story will continue... better watch the second episode right now! :)

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sleeeeep responds:

Yes i did away with the text bubbles. With both the sounds and music i want to keep it as 8-bit as i can, thanks for this good review frien