Score: 6

"Good idea"

submission: JPB '09 Animation History

date: December 3, 2009

I think the idea of this is very nice, but it's posted "too early". There's only three parts and part three is "getting better". There should be following some more parts like "still getting better", "vastly improving", etc. in there before you show this to a public audience.
While you indeed improved your skills and we can see it in this flash there's still a feeling that this flash isn't finished yet.

Of course you are still learning and improving and I can understand that you are eager to show it to a greater audience. But I still think you posted this idea too early.

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Score: 8

"Good"

submission: Conscience and Therapy

date: December 2, 2009

The music fits very good to this submission. Even though the music has some kind of a happy tone to it, it also creates a very dark atmosphere together with the pictures you show.

The graphics are pretty good, but I think the animations could be improved a bit. For example when the car was driving it looked very comical, with the car moving up and down (I don't mean the scene that takes place in the car, but the scene where it is driving up to the hospital). This didn't fit too well into the flash.

Also, why did the car take a turn instead of driving straight ahead to the hospital? If you had drawn a street that curved that way it would be clear why the car takes the turn, but there's no street visible.

I like how you mostly made use of still frames but yet created an illusion of movement with the "zooming cuts" you made.

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Score: 8

"Nice halloween submission"

submission: Shadowman & The Garroter

date: December 2, 2009

The graphics are decent, but could have been a bit cleaner (ie, not so many pencil strokes). I don't think the grapics would lose anything from their creepiness if they wheren't scribbled so much.

I had to watch this twice, the first time I didn't realize that this blond hair was supposed to be a head. So I thought: "What? Who was screaming there when the guillotine came down?".

Maybe you could make this a bit more clearer with showing the victim being led to the guillotine.

But overall it was a very nice submission, very creepy. I especially liked the shadow of the tree in the beginning. Also, the music fits very nice to this submission.

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Score: 7

"Short again"

submission: Back Off

date: December 2, 2009

I think the punchline here isn't as good as in the Red Bull parts. ,As I've said in my other review in my opinion short flashes only work with a hilarious and unexpected punchline. Now, this flash isn't bad, but a longer build up would be nice. You could put some jokes into the build up already and then come up with the main joke of the flash. Maybe showing how the character walks aorund in the streets and then entering the bar (you could throw in some funny scenes on the streets) or show the bar from the outside and then zoom in slowly, showing some other customers on your way to the bar and what they talk about.

The backgrounds where a lot better here, though, at least for the first part. For the other two parts you went back to single coloured backgrounds, unfortunatly.

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Score: 7

"Very short, but nice punchline"

submission: Red Bull Contrib 1 and 2

date: December 2, 2009

Nothing wrong with a short flash if the punchline is good. Here, the punchline was pretty nice.

However, the voices where too loud, there where static sounds all over the place. Also the characters could use some more work. Stickman are all right, but I prefer better worked out characters. On the other hand, maybe the joke wouldn't be as funny if they wheren't stickmen.

Anyway, the backgrounds could definitely use more work. Here, they are just a lightblue wall. It's a bit better than just a white canvas, but with only a little more work you could create better backgrounds. Maybe just add a clock in the background and a door and we could see this is somewhere inside someones house. But this would still look better than just the light blue canvas.

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Score: 10

"Good work"

submission: The Things We Never Said

date: December 2, 2009

A very nice piece. As other reviewers have stated, "real feelings and emotions" is something you don't see that often on newgrounds, but when you see it, the flashes showing it are definitely one of the best around.

I think everyone has gone through similar things in his or her life, sometimes it ends like in this flash: You fall in a deep hole and you know: Dammit, you missed your chance! And the saddest thing about this is, when you know you missed your chance, it will never be the same again when you meet the person in question. :(

Anyway, I like the scenes you put in here during the instrumental parts. And even though the lyrics where sometimes hard to understand it was easy to follow the storyline; pictures say more than a thousand words, right? ;)

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Score: 8

"Short, but nice."

submission: More Dragonforce

date: December 2, 2009

Short, but very nice. The synching was done pretty good and I liked the scene where the black bunnies where singing the vocals.

The scene after that is a bit too dragged out, I think. All we can see is the bunny playing the guitar, headbaning, while the camera moves back and forth. I nearly got sick watching this (or maybe I'm still too tired ^^). I think you should try to add a little more to that scene... and the camera shouldn't move back and forth as well. ^^

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Score: 8

"Nice game"

submission: Mr Agnry Faic 3

date: December 1, 2009

A nice little game with some room for improvement. First of all it would be nice if there was more than just one song to select from. The only option I now have is to either turn the song off or on, but it would be nice if I had one or two more options beside that.
Also, some sound effects in the game would be nice. At first I didn't even realize I couldn't touch the different coloured faices. A sound effect could make things clearer.

It was also a bit frustrating when suddendly right where I was a faic appeared and hurt me. I think it would be better if all icons came in from the sides of the screen rather than randomly appearing there.
To add to that, the screen got filled pretty quickly so the game is pretty short as it gets too hard to survive longer than a few minutes. I think a slower progress of the icons appearing would be nice. Or maybe you could let the icons move off screen after a certain amount of time. But that would mean extra work for you in action scripting, I guess. ^^

Anyway, I liked that you put in three different game play modes, this gives the user something to play around with and it keeps the replay value very high. I liked the paint 'em mode best and I think it's a pretty unique idea.
The timed mode has a serious problem, though. Sometimes I only reached 0 points because no yellow faic would appear in the first 5 seconds. I think at least one faic should appear in this time span or else it's too much based on luck wether I can survive for a long time or not.

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Score: 7

"Hmmm"

submission: Sweet Dreams, Timmy.

date: November 22, 2009

Nice graphics and decent animations. Voice acting was good as well.

The story... well, I guess everybody has some other definition of the word "funny". The setup was pretty good, so when the father starts talking about that "little girl" it sure was unexpected.

You should add some hair to the characters, though. Right now they look more like eggs.

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Score: 8

"Good game"

submission: Bubble Blitz

date: November 22, 2009

A nice little game with pretty good controls and a nice concept. The training modes explained very well what I could expect from this game and they also explained how to play it. ^^

Some things came in the game unexpected, though. At first I didn't even notice the pipes where blowing out air. I thought it was a nother obstacle that destroys my bubble. So, a warning of other things in the tutorial like Kirbyfemur suggests would be a nice thing.

Also, the time on the challenge levels was pretty tight, but... that's why they are called a "challenge", right? ^^

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